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  • Dec 20 Thu 2007 15:05
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What can teachers do to make students more enthusiastic about attending calsses? Use specific details and examples to support your answer?

The issue of what teachers can do to make students more enthusiastic about attending classes deserves careful sonsideration because it is such a complex one. Some people think teachers should try to use multimedia, like computers and television, in their classrooms while other people say that teachers should try to be friendlier. I think both of these are important ways to make students more enthusiastic.

The first way to make students more enthusiastic is to use multimedia. For example, I had a teacher in a biology calss. This teacher used many videotapes and computer programs to interest students. At first I thought biology ws only difficult and boring. The multimedia, however, made it exciting. It was my favorite class that semester.

The second way is to be friendly. Sometimes teachers are too strict. They are not like people but robots. I think teachers should be friendly to students. Communication might be easier and students might enjoy attending calss more. For exampl, my English teacher is very friendly and makes me feel comfortable about learning English.

Of course, there is also an argument to be made for other answers as well. I'm sure there are many things that I have failed to mention. Nevertheless, for the reasons that I have presented above, I believe that my opinion is the most valid.

 

Some/ Others

Step one: identify the topic

有兩個基本句型: 第一個是問你關於一個東西的看法、第二個則是問你關於一個動作的看法。

為了文法的正確性要先把Topic寫成名語片詞

Q: Some people say that money is the key to happiness. Other people say that happinesds is not saomething that can be purchased.

Topic: happiness

Q: Some people say that animals benefit from being in a zoo. Others say that all animals belong in the wild.

Topic: animals

Q: Some peope think that movies are simply a popular form of entertainment. Others feel that movies are a serious art form.

Topic: movies

如果問的是動作,題目通常會有動詞片語:

prefer to read

like to watch

should study

要先把它改成動名詞,才可以插入文章中

Q: Some people prefer to study in the morning. Others prefer to study at night.

Topic: studying

Q: Some people believe that students should wear uniforms to school. Others say that students should be able to wear anything they want.

Topic:wearing uniforms to school

Q: Some people like to read with some music playing in the background. Others like to read in complete silence.

Topic: reading

Step: introducting your thesis

  1. The issue of people's view about happiness deserves careful consideration because it is such a complex one.

  2. It is sometimes difficult to discuss people's views about movies because it is such a multifaceted topic.

  3. When considering people's opinions about animals, there are a variety of points of view to be considered.

  4. The topic of people's opinons about studying can be approached from several different angles due to its complexity.

  5. A complete consideration of people's views about reading is difficult to present because they are so varied.

  6. When reflecting on people's opinions about wearing uniforms to school, it is important to consider two basic points of view.

文章的下一句應該要提到本題目的兩個選擇。只要利用已經提供在題目中的句子,加上seem 或是tend,再用一個連接詞(while)把整句連起來。

The issue of people's view about happiness deserves careful consideration because it is such a complex one. Some people seem to think that money is the key to happiness. Other people tend to think that happiness is not something that can be purchased.


The topic of people's opinons about studying can be approached from several different angles due to its complexity. Some people seem to prefer to study in the morning. Others tend to prefer to study at night.


在寫到thesis,先作好一個tour guide

I have come to my own conclusion.

I have develpted my own point of view as well.

Step three: your thesis statement

你的thesis statement不只是要把你的意見提出來,也要預告你下面將要寫作的方式

There are three reasons why I think taht money is the key to happiness.

I prefer to study in the morning for three important reasons.


  1. People hold many differing opinions about happiness because it is such a complex one. Some people seem to think that money is the key to happiness. Other people tend to think that happiness is not something that can be purchased. Nevertheless, I have come to my own conclusion.There are three reasons why I think that happiness is not something that can be purchased.

  2. The issue of playing an important role in a child's education deserves careful consideration because it is such a complex one. Some people seem to say that parents play the most important role in a child's education while other people tend to say teachers play a stronger one. I have come to my own conclusion. There are three reasons why I think parents play the most important role in a child's education.


Step four: the body paragraphs

Three (or more) reasons:

The first reason for my position is...

The second reason is ...

The final reason is...


Three (or more) reasons:

One reason is...

Another reason is...

However, the most important reason is...


Two reasons

One reason is...

The other reason is ...


要加上名詞、名詞片語或名詞子句才行

The first reason for my position is that some wealthy people are unhappy.

The second reason is that some poor people are very happy.

The final reason is love.

也要解釋這個理由的來源及重要性才行


The first reason for my position is that some wealthy people are unhappy. For example, I had a friend in high school who was very rich. However, he often complained that he was not happy.

The second reason is that some people are very happy. For instance, my uncle is a Buddhist monk, although he has very few possessions, he is one of the happiest people I know. The final reason is love. My parents always told me that love is the key to happiness. All of these experiences have influenced my opinion on this issue.


Step five: conclusion

最佳開啟conculsion paragraph的方式是用一個讓步句。讓步句也是一個讓你再次強調立場好藉口。

Of course, there is also an argument to be made for the opposing position.

That's not to say, of course, that other points of view are completely without merit.

I don't mean to suggest that my point of view is unassailable.

Of course, there my be some people who disagree with my position on this matter. They may assert that (加子句)

千萬不要把文章的最後一句話讓給opposing position,一定要再次宣佈你的thesis

Of course, there is also an argument to be made for the opposing position. Nervertheless, for the reasons that I have presented above, I believe that my opinion is the most valid.

That's not to say, of course, that other points of view are completely without merit. However, I think that the resons I have provided in favor of my point of view are stronger.

Of course, I don't mean to suggest that my point of view is unassailable. Nevertheless, I feel that my opinion is built on a solid foundation.

Of course, there my be some people who disagree with my position on this matter. They may assert that for some people happiness can be related to possessions. However, I feel confident that the reasons I have presented for my position are more important.


Agree/ disagree

Step one: identify the topic

  1. 名語片語+be動詞+形容詞

    主題就在句子開頭的名語片語出現

    postion statement: working for one company throughout your career is better than changing jobs.

    Topic: working

    postion statement: Dormitories are the best places for students to live.

    Topic: dormitories

  2. 名語片語+should(be required to)+動詞

    postion statement: teachers should be strict about assignment deadlines.

    Topic:teachers being strict

    postion statement:students should be required to perform community service as part of their university education.

    Topic: students performing community service

Step: introducting your thesis

反覆一次你被問到的問題,再慢慢的發展出來你的idea

It has been said that teachers should go back to school for a few months every year to improve their knowledge.

Many people ahve assered that the most important reason for going to college is meeting a wide variety of people.

Some people hold that there are times when lying is accetable.

It has often been said that in some situations, students should challenge the ideas of their teachers.

A number of people maintain that the only way to succeed in life is through formal education.

同意的句型

Although it would be easy to reject this statement at face value, the issue is a complex one.

While the first reaction of some people may be to disagreewith this statement, there are compelling reasons to explore the issue omroe in depth.

Some may be moved to dismiss this statement out of hand, but I feet it is worthy of deeper consideration.

再強調一遍

Personally, I agree with this statement for xxx reasons.

In my opinion, there are xxx reasons be agree with this statement.

From my point of view, I find that I agree with the statement for xxx reasons.

反駁的句型

Although it would be easy to accept this statement at face value, the issue is a complex one.

While the first reaction of some people may be to agree with this statement, there are compelling reasons to explore the issue omroe in depth.

Some may be moved to admit this statement out of hand, but I feet it is worthy of deeper

consideration.

再強調一遍

Personally, I disagree with this statement for xxx reasons.

In my opinion, there are xxx reasons be disagree with this statement.

From my point of view, I find that I disagree with the statement for xxx reasons.


It has been said that teachers should go back to school for a few months every year to improve their knowledge. Although it would be easy to reject this statement at face value, the issue is a complex one.Personally, I agree with this statement for xxx reasons.


The first reason for my agreement is ...

The next reason is ...

The final reason is support of my positin is...

One reason I cannot supporet the statement is...

Another reason is ...

However, the most important reason why I cannot agree with the statement is...

需有名詞、名詞片語或名詞子句

The first reason for my agreement is progress.

The next reason is variety.

The final reason is support of my positin is that teachers who learn about new ideas can make their students feel more interested in class.

One reason I cannot supporet the statement is that may people succeed without a formal education.

Another reason is natural talent.

However, the most important reason why I cannot agree with the statement is success is different for different people.


The first reason for my agreement is progress. For example, high technology fields are changing all the time. The best way for a teacher to learn about these changes is by going to class. The next reason is variety. That is to say, I believe that teachers need to learn aobut a wide range of subjects in order to be effective. The final reason in support of my postion is that teachers who I learn about new ideas can make their students feel more interested in class. For example, my computer teacher in high school work very hard to learn about the Internet. Then she taught those things to her students and helpted them become interested in computers. All of these reasons have had a deep influence on my point of view about teachers going back to school. (句子清楚的點出Teachers should go back to school for a few months every year to improve their knowledge)


One reason I cannot supporet the statement is that may people succeed without a formal education.My grandfather is a great example. He never graduated from high-school, but he was a successful business man.

Another reason is natural talent.Some people have a talent for music or art. It might be better for these people to receive a less structured education. They could focus that education on their special skill.

However, the most important reason why I cannot agree with the statemetn is that success is different for different people. A good example is my mother. She never received a formal college education. However, she is very respected by everyone in our family and in the community. She volunteers a lot of her time to help children learn how to readd. She also takes care of her mother who is very old. In my opinion, her life has been very successful.

Step five: conclusion





comparison:

Step one: identify the topic

Some students prefer to classes where they can paricipate in discussions. Other students prefer classes in which the teacher lectures and the studentss take notes. Compare the advantages of these two educational approaches. Which is better for you, why?

Topic: classes

You have some important news to tell a friend. Compare soem different methods of communication you could use (telephone, face-to-face, email, etc...)Tell which method you would most likely to pick. why?

Topic: communication

Your friend is trying to decide where to live. He/She has two options:

Live on compus in a dormitory

Live off compus in an apartment

Your friend wants some advice. Compare the two options and indicate which your friend should shoose select. Remember to use specific examples.


Step two: introducting your thesis

some/other一樣,把兩個point of view提出來

This issue of people's views about classes deserves careful consideration because it is such a complex one. Some students seem to prefer classes where they can participate in disucssions while other students tend to prefer classes in which the teacher lectures and the students take notes.


When considering methods of communication, there are a varity of points of view to be analyzed. Some people tend to prefer using the telephone while other people seem to prefer face-to-face communication.


Step three: you thesis

如果是some/other essay,你可以直接的寫出,但是在comparison essay裡,你需要用一個比較的方法來支持你的 thesis。必須要先跟讀者提到你將要用一個比較的方式來支持你的 thesis

A comparision of these two views indicates that classes where students can participate in discussions is better.

When these views are compared, face-to-face communication is better.

Step four: the body paragraphs

一個兩段落的postion-by-postion的組織,而且第一段一定要先寫你不會選的一方,第二段才是支持你thesis的一方

Some students prefer to classes where they can paricipate in discussions. Other students prefer classes in which the teacher lectures and the studentss take notes. Compare the advantages of these two educational approaches. Which is better for you, why?

Body paragraph one

On the one hand there are the advantages of lecture classes.

Body paragraph two

On the other hand, there are advantages of discussion classes.

Body paragraph one

First, let's look at the advantages of lecture classes.

Body paragraph two

Now, let's turn to the dvantages of discussion classes.

Many studens choose to take classes during summer vacation. Compare the advantages and disadvantages of doing so. Which do you prefer? Why?

Body paragraph one

On the one hand there are the advantages of taking classes during summer vacation.

Body paragraph two

On the one hand, there are the disadvantages of taking classes during summer vacation.


Body paragraph one

Let's first consider the advantages of taking classes during summer vacation.

Body paragraph two

However, there are disadvantages considered as well.

Body paragraph one

There are some advantages to taking classes during summer vacation.

Body paragraph two

Although there are advantages, there are disadvantages to be considered as well.


One the one hand, here are the advantages of lecture classes. The main advantage is that lecture classes are very efficient. Lecture classes don't wast a lot of time. The teacher can present a great deal of information. Some of my chemistry classes were lecture classes, and I learned a lot by listening to the the teacher.

On the other hand, there are advantages of discussion classes. The first advantage is that studetns can interact with the teacher and with other students. I think this helps students to learn more quickly. The second advantage is that discussion is more interesting than jsut taking notes. The final advantage si friendship. I met my best friend at college in a discussion class. We did a project togetehr on the history of Taiwan. We re still good friends today.


Step five: conclustion

Quantity:

I favor the latter position over the former because its advantages are quantitatively greater.

Quality:

I favor the latter position over the former because its advantages are qualitatively greater.

Quantity:

Because the advantages are quantitatively greater than the disadvantages, I favor the latter positon.

Quality:

Because the advantages are qualitatively greater than the disadvantages, I favor the latter positon.


I favor the latter positon over the former because its advantages are quantitatively greater. Of course, there is an arguemtn to be made for opposing position. Nevertheles, for the reasons that I have presneted above, I believe that my opinion is the most valid.

Opinion questions沒有一個固定的題型,所以它就比較難被辨認出來。只要題目中沒有compare, some people...other people..., agree or disagree,它就是一個opinion question

有時候題目中會有一個具像的問題

what is your opinion?

有時候題目中會有一個question word:

What

Which

How

Why

其它的題目類型中,托福早就已經幫你想好一兩個point of view了,你所需要做的只要挑一個來寫。但是在opinion 的題目,你需要自己想辦法。

People choose to study abroad for many reasons. Why do you think people choose to study abroad? Use specific reasons and examples in support of your answer.

It has been said that leardership is an important skill to develop. Why do you think are the characteristics of a good leader in any field? Use specific details and examples to support your ansewer.

Imagine you work in the Admisiions Office of a university. You must decide who to admit into the school. Which of the following factors will be the most important in making your decisions. ?

1.Test scores and grades.

2.A personal essay

3.A personal interview

Use specific details and examples to support your answer.

Step one: indentifying the topic

What are some quality of a good friend? Use specific details and examples to explain your answer.

Topic: qualities of a good friend

Some people are very concerned with their personal apprearance(clothing, hairstyle, makeup). Why do some people think personal appearance is so important? Use specific details and examples to explain your answer.

Topic: personal appearance

有時候關鍵的現象會在題目中重複地出現。它就是Topic

There are many types of popular entertainment. Choose one of the following and explain why it is the best form of entertainment.

Movies

television shows

books

Use specific details and examples to explain your answer.

Topic: best form of entainment


Step two: introducing your thesis

只要想出兩個qualities,然後再插進some/others structure

What are some quality of a good friend? Use specific details and examples to explain your answer.

Some people seem to think that honesty is a quality of good friend while others think that sympathy is more important. I have developed my own point of view as well.think that both of these are qualities of a good friend.

When considering personal appearance, there are a variety of points of view to be analyzed. Some people seem to be very concerned with their personal apprearance, because it is important to society while others are concerned becasue it affects how people feel about themselves. I have also come to my own conclusion. I think that both of these factors paly a role.

There are many types of popular entertainment. Choose one of the following and explain why it is the best form of entertainment.

Movies

television shows

books

Use specific details and examples to explain your answer.

The topic of the best form of entertainment can be approached from several different anagles due to its complexity. Some people tend to say that books are the best form of entertainment while others seem to think that movies are the best. I have develpted my own point of view as well. I feel that books are the best form of entainment for three key reasons.

Step three: body paragraphs

The first quality of a good friend is honesty. For example, my best friend always gives me honest advice. This is important, espeically when I am going to make a mistake. My best friend always honestly tells me what he thinks. He does not only tell me good things. The second quality is sympathy. For example, when I was in high-school, my grandfather died suddenly. My best friend gave me a lot of sympathy and support during that tiem. His sympathy really helpted me. Each of these experiences has influenced my opinion on this issue.

Step four: conclusion

Of course, there are arguemnts to be made for other answers as well. Nevertheless, for the reasons I have presented above, I believe that my answer is a valid one.


That's not to say that other anwers are completely without merit. However, I think the reasons I have provided in fave of my answer are quite strong.



















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題目:Name several important personality traits, attitudes, or habits that are considered to be helpful in order to get along well with other people. Support your ideas with examples.  
 
評語: 此篇作文為四級分,全文之文法、字彙及句構皆掌握良好,堪稱佳作。文分三段:分別為引言、舉例說明及結語,段落分明,組織良好。文法及詞彙使用雖仍有些許錯誤,但並不影響讀者之理解。
 

剖析:

      It is important to get along with other people in a society or community. But it seems not so easy to get along "well" with other people especially because everyone has so many differences in personality, attitudes and habits. Here are some examples
                  
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which would be helpful to build up better relationship with other people.
           
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      I remember my supervisor who used to teach me educational psychology and she
                                                                   註解3
always kept big smile and did everything positively, everyone seemed to like her.
Once she told me that a big smile could break any fences between people's hearts.
                                                                               
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She seldom had argument with others and was like a friend by your side. Also she
                                    
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never treated people emotionally even if they hurt her feeling, instead, she helped
                              
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them to feel better.

      I think a person who is helpful and broad-minded can always get along well with
                               
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other people.
Besides, never feel embarrassed to give your friends a big smile even if
                                         註解8
they are under the mood.

 

 

註解1 本句整體來說句法結構良好,但劃線部分未能正確表達作者認為人皆不同的想法,改為"they differ so much in personality, attitudes and habit."較貼切。
 
註解2 作者之意應為藉舉例來說明如何建立人際關係,故應改為"Here are some examples which show how to build up better relationships with other people."
relationships應為複數。
 
註解3 作者於本段的舉例說明相當簡潔、生動。但劃線的部分連接的兩個概念,應該分開成為獨立的兩個句子。一為作者憶起教過她教育心理學的老師,另一為描述老師的言行為何受到大家的喜愛。
同時
"big smile"應改為"a big smile"並加上"on her face";同句之"did everything positively"未能正確表達作者對老師的態度的看法,宜改為"did everything with a positive attitude"。由於she always kept a big smile on her face and did everything with a positive attitude等原因,大家都喜歡她,因此在everyone seemed to like her前應加上so以表示因果關係。
 
註解4 應改為break down
fences存在於人與人之間,故people's hearts宜改為people
 
註解5 arguments應為複數形,然而此部份較自然的說法為she seldom argued with others...。
此處代名詞有誤,應改為like a friend to them以對應前面的others
 
註解6 "she never treated people emotionally"應改為"she never reacted emotionally to people";feelings應為複數形且之後應使用分號以區分這兩個獨立的子句。
轉折詞
instead用得很好。
 
註解7 本句包含一個以who引導的關係子句,全句文法結構正確,詞彙使用適當,如helpful,broad-minded等。
 
註解8 此句隱藏的主詞為you,但前一句話作者指的是一般人(a person who...can always...),因此本句的主詞非you而應改為one,同理,其後之your應改為one's
Under the mood應改為in a bad mood才正確。
 
此篇作文修訂後如下文:
 It is important to get along with other people in a society or community. But it seems not so easy to get along "well" with other people especially because they differ so much in personality, attitudes and habits. Here are some examples which show how to build up better relationships with other people.

    I remember my supervisor who used to teach me educational psychology. She always kept a big smile on her face and did everything with a positive attitude, so everyone seemed to like her. Once she told me that a big smile could break down any fences between people. She seldom argued with others and was like a friend to them. Also she never reacted emotionally to people even if they hurt her feelings; instead, she helped them to feel better.

    I think a person who is helpful and broad-minded can always get along well with other people. Besides, one should never feel embarrassed to give one’s friends a big smile even if they are in a bad mood.

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